Solid writing, narrator really sounds like a young man who isn't fully comfortable with relationships: the 'I'm a good guy' but subtle hypocrisy, touch of creepy obsessiveness, fawning over Nessie, and how he's strongly visually descriptive since he's an artist.
Tho it was a bit weird to me he's 20 (if I heard that right) but I'm not thoroughly familiar with your OCs. Just throwing that out there.
I'm a recent fan and enjoy your lewd animations and now realize you have a strong sense of story and pacing, which is probably why I like them so much. And you typically pick great shots and pictures to further tell the story and express a character.
Look forward to your future stuff, SFW and NSFW. Great job